100 Word Challenge
The Flying Girl
As Jake sauntered outside at 9.00pm he looked up into the dark navy sky dotted with bright yellow stars. He lay down onto the lush green grass and gazed around the whole sky ( the parts that he could see anyway. ) Suddenly he saw a small dot of colour, colour that did not belong in the sky. If he looked closer he could see that it was a girl. She was flying! But how did she get up there? Jake was so shocked that he ran inside to his bedroom. When he looked out of his window he could still see the flying girl.
You have chosen specific word to create a setting for your reader. Your idea is very creative. I like how you made the flying girl seem along way up in the sky, describing her as a dot. Well done. Continue to work on identifying where your sentences finish.
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